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Anonymous Resume critique

hey savages


I posted in here the other day seeking resume tips for landing my first sales role with no experience, and @braintank recommended that I upload an anonymous resume for review


for anyone who's already crushed their quotas and has some time to kill, I've attached a .pdf for you to tear to shreds and set on fire


I've got a few SDR gigs saved that I plan to apply to as soon as I feel good about my resume, so, hopefully tomorrow (Tuesday)


thanks homies

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Gasty
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War Room Community Manager
My 2 cents:

1. You taking this anonymous resume creation seriously and asking for feedback, in itself shows how serious you are about this. So 10/10 on willingness.
2. As a hiring manager, I have a thing against multiple-page resumes. Saying more in fewer words is a skill in itself. Try putting all this info into a single page if you can.


P.S.: I love your exposure section ( <3 )

realname
Valued Contributor
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Grocery Clerk
If I adjusted some sizing, stripped out some skills and tools, and dropped the handyman role, I could probably get it to one page (not counting the letter, which I’ll replace with a tailored cover letter when requested/preferred)

Does that sound like a good plan, or should I try to keep the handyman role in there?

Since I’m including a link out to a much longer, digital-only resume that touches on my previous leadership roles and expands on my client work as a marketer (and also my LinkedIn profile), could I get away with a leaner experience section?
Gasty
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War Room Community Manager
If possible, keep the handyman role right in there. Even a single-liner about it can be decent enough.
CuriousFox
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The more experience you have the more likely you are to have two pages. Which is ok. 

My two cents: remove any fluff and tailor your resume to each role you apply. Showcase your value, showing why they need to talk to you.
jefe
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Glad you put yourself out there @realname ! Looks pretty good, though the font seems a bit big to me.

I'm inclined to agree with Foxy here.. More than 2 pages isn't great, but when you've been around having 2 is key to covering everything - especially if you had multiple responsibilities in your previous roles. 
braintank
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Enterprise Account Executive
First impressions:
• 1 page max.
• Drop the entire skills page. Way too long and 99% of it isn't relevant.
• Needs numbers. Increased X by Y
• Clean up the formatting. Random bolding looks odd.
• Beef up experience as ecomm owner and freelance consultant, downplay the musician role.
braintank
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Enterprise Account Executive
@realnameHere's mine for example/comparison. I'm pretty proud of it :)

CatMom
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Account Executive
Yeah I’d be inclined to hire you based on the cover letter alone. Great job! Remove that middle page with skills and tools and you’re golden!
TennisandSales
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Head Of Sales
love this. 
I normally hate cover letters, but I hope people read yours. It made me want to look at the resume which i think is the whole point. 

I only had a sec so here are a few things that stood out: 

1. under skills: all the bold ones should be first. then the non bold skills should be behind that. 

2. tools and platforms: Have most exposure first and least exposure last. you need to keep ppls attention, put the good stuff first. 

3. Work experience: you need stats. 
i like that you call out beer and wine is high margin product. it would be great if there was a way to quantify that. (it might be impossible) But be able to say : last month I added an additional $200 by upselling customers. 

Same with your ecommerce store name. How much revenue do you do every month? What was your biggest month? How many repeat customers do you have? things like that. 

For the music and handyman work: how many gigs/projects do you run a month? some sort of stat to show ppl that you understand your business and can track success. every SDR has to be good with understanding basic metrics. 
Justatitle
Big Shot
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Account Executive
1 page resume. It’s entry level you’re not looking for a c-suite role
NoSuperhero
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BDR LEAD
I think I have to agree with most comments, it's actually a pretty solid resume, 3 pages is a bit much, though, compromise the middle page, and as @CuriousFox says focus on your strengths and what value you bring to the table.
Pachacuti
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They call me Daddy, Sales Daddy
Rule of thumb for resumes is 1 page for every 10 years.  You're entry level, keep it to 1 page.

Listing "Blogging" as your first Skill doesn't say much.  Get rid of the Skills section and get rid of the Tools & Platforms section.  They will train you on what you need to know. 

--> In fact get rid of the entire first page with the exception of your name and contact info.

On your Experience - get rid of Handyman.


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Arsonist
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Account Executive
A resume should always 100 percent of the time be one page. Otherwise, make a CV. If you do have to bleed on to a second page, then your entire resume should only be capturing your professional/educational experience. NO FLUFF. 
TheIncarceration
Politicker
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SDR Manager
I'm generally not one to care for cover letters but I really liked yours! Like some of the others mentioned, I'd cut down on the actual resume portion and change the font size to fit one page. Less is more sometimes 

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