i meaaannn can you really not lose something you don’t already have…? ((thoughts on this email template))

subj: <<name>>, i’m going to be blunt here

body:
dear first name,

i’m <<>>, a young professional 110% to goal on the month and in spitting distance of breaking an office ‘rookie’ record. With your help I think we could absolutely smash it.

The context:

Hey <<>>, i’m reaching out because due to current market conditions and your <<company>>‘s parralels to our recent client <<XXX>>.

Effectively, it’s my job to facilitate a 30-45 minute live proof of value exercise, demo, stress test, etc. of our platform for you. From what <<< link to rich podcast >>> (minute 30:42) are citing our data to back their theses & analyses… we might be able to help.

The markets are tumbling both in public and private across most sectors. Our platform specializes in reporting on recent activity within the private sector to the same transparency you would expect from a public one. It rocks.

My ask:

Name a 30-45 minute slot on Tuesday, May 31st where you’d be available to participate in this webcall/screenshare. 

Please, take advantage of the opportunity to see the private markets in real time.

Or don’t, as the saying goes we don’t know what we don’t know. 

With respect and gratitude,
<<>>

PS - here's to hoping, right?
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FuckMaybes
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Account Executive
Bro like you ima be blunt,

firstly this shit is way too long and convoluted, there is ZERO CHANCE a decision-maker spends the time to read anything that can't fit on a phone.

secondly this email wrecks of "me" - "I'm young professional 110% smth" "my job to facilitate ABC". The decision maker does not give a fuck about you - only what you can do for them. 


Here's a template for you

{first name}, 

{personalized line} "congrats on recent xyz etc."

{value}Recently, we helped your competitor A & B do XYZ in ABC timeframe

{call to action} got some time this week or next to explore opportunities? (insert cal link) 

Best, Whirlybird
WhirlyBird
Good Citizen
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SDR
I LOVE THE WR. thank you @FuckMaybes this is exactly what i needed
Kosta_Konfucius
Politicker
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Sales Rep
Got to keep emails readable for the phone
funcoupons
WR Officer
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👑
JFC I read two lines and thought “immediately no.” No. Burn it. 
WhirlyBird
Good Citizen
2
SDR
consider it burnt
CuriousFox
WR Officer
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Senior Account Executive
You listen to instruction well. 🍸
WhirlyBird
Good Citizen
1
SDR
no such thing as good writing, only good revision.

plus - honest feedback like this is EXACTLY what i need for my continued growth / development.

again, thank you.
Gasty
WR Colonel
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Community Manager [War Room]
I'd trim it down a bit:

Hey XX. My job is to facilitate a 30-45 minute live proof of value exercise, demo, stress test, etc. of our platform for you. From what <<< link to rich podcast >>> (minute 30:42) are citing our data to back their theses & analyses… we might be able to help.

My ask: Name a 30-45 minute slot on Tuesday, May 31st where you’d be available to participate in this webcall/screenshare. 
Sounds like a plan?

regards,
bird
andrewwmillerr
Good Citizen
1
AE
trash that pal.  trying to follow sandler? nothing like a 70-year-old sales ideology.  
WhirlyBird
Good Citizen
0
SDR
what methodology do you follow?
andrewwmillerr
Good Citizen
1
AE
there are many aspects of Sandler I do follow, the upfront contract, the pain funnel, etc. 
from an OB perspective, I firmly believe that its time has passed.  

I don't follow a single, but i would recommend transparency sales, sell without selling out, and Gap selling.  

These wont help with outreach just ensuring you having a great sales process throughout which is paramount  
cashmachine
Politicker
1
AE (Account Executive)
this is way too long. need to be more concise, add value, close.
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