JamesBond

Student @ Getting Sales Job

Resume Critique

Hey fellas,

Hope all of you are having a good weekend! First post here but I have been lurking for a bit.

I'm hoping that resume critiques are still valid posts as I read a couple in the past but I'm sure that @gastly will give me a swift kick in the behind if not!

I'm graduating soon (end of April) and been looking to get into sales. About a month ago I started shotgun applying to SDR/BDR roles to no avail and recently switched up my method and have been trying to expand my network at a few choice companies have been getting informational interviews with anybody I can get my hands on. Well, an entry position has opened up for an SDR position at one of these companies. Two people I have had informational interviews with would be willing to provide an internal reference (to the best of my knowledge) one being an SDR on the team I would potentially join and the other an AE. Regardless, I still want to make sure I smack the resume part out of the park. I intend on contacting hiring manager after submitting my application and am still waiting on LinkedIn connections with the rest of the SDR team that went out before the position opened up.

I don't have any sales experience but I have tried to frame what I could to come across either as relationship building and communication, or organization, attention to detail, and optimization.

If you guys have any input at all that would be amazing! If not, I appreciate you getting this far in.

Have a great weekend.

JamesBond

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oldcloser

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Mr Bond- gonna shoot straight. At first glance all I see is big bullets, which come off as a tactic to fill space on the page. When I zoom in I see one asset and one liability. Your education is the asset. The bug company needs to come off this. It wouldn’t if your role there had anything to do with selling, but it doesn’t.

I don’t find anything anywhere on this document that makes you an applicant for a sales role. If I were reviewing it from a stack of applicants, this wouldn’t make the first cut.

Your degree says discipline. It’s the only part that does you any justice. Otherwise, this resume does not say sales.

Lose the bug co. Pick another and blow it up too. Then, find a way to weave sales, biz dev, or customer growth throughout the remaining experiences. The doc needs to say “this guy thinks, solves problems, and communicates masterfully”. It currently does not.

Please revise and repost. We’ll dial you in.

JamesBond

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Student @ Getting Sales Job

You're the man @oldcloser! I needed some tough love.I think I am going to split my experience into relevant and additional, the latter being at the end of the resume. I refined the relevant experience to 3, with the help from HVACs comment so we're looking like this right now:
Formatting screwed up so feel free not to read it haha. Appreciate it nonetheless.

Student Volunteer - Held private and group discovery meetings with College of Biological Sciences students to explore and identify pain points related to the Biological Science program. - Compiled detailed reports summarizing findings from discovery sessions and offered recommendations for program improvements.
Crew lead - Supported client retention through relationship management and personalized service delivery. - Saved 15 payable hours per week by transforming weekly work schedule to increase crew efficiency and reduce transport and material costs.- Coached 4 new employees to ensure a high standard of work quality and outstanding customer interactions.
Snowboard Instructor - Increased revenue by strategically upselling additional services and private lesson packages to enrolled and prospective clients. - Employed effective objection handling to address client concerns and secure bookings. - Built rapport and fostered relationships while communicating snowboarding concepts to clients of all ages encouraging repeat business.
Throwing it in here because I don't wanna clog up the feed with my issues! Thanks for your feedback!

HVACexpert

Politicker

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sales engineer

Are you looking at companies that relate to your major? I would search in that lane if possible, your degree might help more. Otherwise you might get lost against the marketing , and business majors. Perhaps Medtech, pharma, med products, veterinarian, etc. and search related sales roles. Know anyone who works as an SDR/BDR who can give you a referral or reference?

Put the volunteer work in your school as work experience. Were you an officer or leader at your college clubs? If so add it.

You can keep the camp counselor and bug company in, but take the description out. Make room for the volunteer work and further description of other experience.

If you have a good GPA post it.

Make sure to tailor the description to tie into sales/customer service/client facing aspects somehow.

Your layout is kind of bland, there are a lot of free contemporary templates online, find one that works for you.

ZVRK

Politicker

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Enterprise Account Executive

Definitely @JamesBond this, you should look into companies in the domain of your major. Also, start connecting to hiring managers and sales teams in companies that related to your field. Get on a more proactive approach, sales managers and leaders like that :)

JamesBond

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Student @ Getting Sales Job

Definitely what I am doing now. Not even applying to stuff unless I have spoken to at least one person in the company. My main focus is on building my network out right now. Confident that the right job will come around. Thank you!!!

JamesBond

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Student @ Getting Sales Job

@HVACexpert, that's great!! Definitely looking for my major, the one I plan on applying to next has a life science vertical that I am targeting but this position wouldn't start there, much more general. Have 2 people inside that I can get a referral from that I had informational interviews with, both said they would be willing to do so.
The volunteer work is a great idea! Definitely threw that in as you can see in my response to oldcloser.
Last 2 semesters have a great GPA but my overall GPA isn't good enough to put in unfortunately.
Layout looks much spicier now too :)
Thanks for your input, honestly didn't expect nearly this much so that's amazing!

oldcloser

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This is a freaking solid revision. Excellent work. Now you’re showing you understand parts of the process, and you know how to deal with and influence people.

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