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Any luck with super short email outreach?

I know it's common to have a great response rate for quick second email attempts. "thoughts?" is a common one.

How about really brief FIRST emails? Curious if this has ever worked?

Maybe like:

"Greg, I think we can help. 

I just onboarded X and the Y is amazing. 

Thoughts?"
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Kosta_Konfucius
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Sales Rep
I havent used anything that short on the first cold email, but I assume the shorter the email the more responses you get.
CuriousFox
WR Officer
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Prospects like short emails. Even better if you can bullet point for a quick glance.
Coastal_crusher
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Sales Director
Considering people tend to check emails on their phone, keeping it at phone screen length is worthwhile
SADNESSLieutenant
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Officer of ♥️
I'll answer your question with another question.

Would you rather read a page long email trying to tell you one thing or 2 sentences telling you the same thing?
Sunbunny31
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Sr Sales Executive 🐰
Brevity is underrated. As long as the value prop is there and your message is clear, it should work very well!
SDM
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Sales development manager
Agree
Coastal_crusher
Politicker
4
Sales Director
I wouldn’t say no to this, but maybe the super short ones like this are more worth a LinkedIn message?

I’d add a quick value add to show you do research. Eg.

“Finboi, notice you post in WR a lot

I just on-boarded Coastal and he’s seeing X wins

Worth a conversation?”

Something like that
finboi
Notorious Answer
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Fi-nance
Wow I’m shocked at the overwhelming positive responses here. Maybe I shouldn’t be given my curiosity and intuition.
Sunbunny31
Politicker
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Sr Sales Executive 🐰
Well, I mean the best way to find out is to give it a shot and test it, to see if you're right.
finboi
Notorious Answer
1
Fi-nance
Already on it
Pachacuti
Politicker
4
They call me Daddy, Sales Daddy
I like using geographic prospecting. Using names of companies in the same geographic region as my target prospect. And sending those target prospects the names of those companies with a short blurb telling them that we are working with the other companies and I’d like to share with the target company what we’re doing to be successful with them.

It works for me.
jefe
Arsonist
4
🍁
I've only done really short follow ups, they've worked okay.

Brevity is king though.
Diablo
Politicker
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Sr. AE
I would write company name instead of we. How do you know the prospects exact challenge?
BlueJays2591
Politicker
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Federal Business Dev Director
I only send emails that are 4, maybe 5 sentences max. A lot of times they read the email on their cell, so it helps with readability. I'm not sending a marketing email, so it's very short and very direct
ThatNewAE
Big Shot
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Account Executive - Mid enterprise
Umm. I wouldn't use this email if I were in this place. I would add some sort of value as well. Why should they listen to me just because I onboarded X and Y? Unless I did something incredible for X and Y, I don't think they would reply.
Personal take tho.
SDM
Politicker
1
Sales development manager
My emails are usually between 75 to 100 words... sometimes around 50. Do you consider this short?
finboi
Notorious Answer
0
Fi-nance
Yes- I’ve usually used 125 words as my hard cap but I’m trying to cut down to less than 75
Arzola
Valued Contributor
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Business administration
Personally, it never worked for me, many companies consider it a joke or not very serious. It sounds curious since long emails are not read either, I think it would be something very intermediate and that it became an art to get the perfect email.
WhoDey
Opinionated
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VP of Sales
Do A/B testing and see which works better.
finboi
Notorious Answer
0
Fi-nance
For sure
commishcapo
Opinionated
0
Commercial Account Exec
Short emails are where it’s at. Optimize for mobile ideally

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